I have a blissful home.My father is a man of learned.He is working in a international company as a manager.My mother is a remarkable housekeeper.She is a woman of method.She always puts covers on me every night.I am deeply impressed.She economizes on money to let us live happily.It is true that we respect her.My parents are inseparable.They seldom argue over trivial matter.They will share in their joys and sorrows.I have a brother who is nineteen years old.He is proficient in playing the piano.He is also at home in geography.I have a younger sister who is fourteen years old.She adores to read books.She is versed in biology.When it comes to me.I am a girl that is sixteen years old.English is my favorite.My motto is **what is worth doing is worth doing well.**
I always do my level best.Living in such a fantastic family makes me so jovial.
My father is a man of learned.有學問的人=My father is a learning man. put covers是蓋被子,非蓋子~
- 1 decade agoFavorite Answer
"my father is a man of learned. he is working in a international company as a manager"我不是很懂你的意思my father is a man of learned,但是你可以說：my father is a manager of an internaltional company. or you can that: my father works in an internaltional company as a manager.
"When it comes to me"you can say:"and it's my trun now"
"i'm a girl that is..." maybe you should say"i'm a sixteen-year-old girl" and it would be much better.
"i always do my level best"you can just say:"i always try do my best!"
可以幫你改的地方不多，或許我的造詣也不是很好，有的地方我不是很懂你的意思，例如:he is also at home in geography?看的出來你應該也挺用心的吧，可以給你的建議是多用一點連接詞，ex: and, however, more over,except,what's more...ect.
可以讓句子看起來有一點連慣性，也比較有變化。當然，也要盡量避免同樣的字詞一再出現，近可能找一些替代詞語，或者多使用關係代名詞和形容詞子句。能幫的只有這些囉!加油!!!Source(s): by myself
- 1 decade ago
我有一個有福的home.My 父親的我家是learned.He 的一個人在一個國際公司中工作因為manager.My母親是卓越的housekeeper.She 是method.She 的婦女總把蓋子放在我上每night.I 上午impressed.She 深深地節約在金錢讓我們居住happily.It 是真實的我們尊敬her.My 父母是inseparable.They 關於瑣細的matter.They 很少爭論將分享在他們的喜悅並且sorrows.I 有是十九年old.He 是熟練在演奏piano.He 是在geography.I 在家並且有一個妹妹是十四年old.She 崇拜讀books.She 是熟練的在biology.When 它來到me.I 上午女孩是十六年old.English 的一個兄弟是我的favorite.My 座右銘是** 什麼值得做值得做很好。* * 我總做我的水平best.Living 在這樣一個意想不到家庭使我很快活。