婷婷 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

懇請幫忙修改英文推薦信

因為工作及進修需要推薦信,草擬以下兩封,請各位前輩幫忙修改謝謝

1.

To whom it may concern:

I , as a chest surgery doctor in Chunghua Christian Hospital , which is a 2000 beds medical center in Chunghua, Taiwan. I would like to recommend my former staff, Miss Nien Ting Ting for her job in your hospital.

From 1999, Miss Nien started work in surgery ICU-I. In 2000-2003, I was the director in the same unit. At that time, I found she was well organized and has talent in nursing. She could discover potential problem, also knew how to handle different conditions. Furthermore, she has been able to control whole situation while she was on duty as a leader. May she is young and from different view between a doctor and a nurse, she was not scare to discuss with doctors. I am confident that she will become a mature person and accomplish all tasks assigned to her.

Although Miss Nien decide to work abroad is a loss for our hospital, I have no reservations in recommending her to your place.I hope you will offer her the opportunity to pursue her career goals.

Sincerely yours

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To whom it may concern:

As a chief of surgery ICU-I, I am glad to recommend Miss Nien Ting Ting, a former staff of mine.

Miss Nien, has worked at our hospital for 6 years from 1999 till 2005. She decided to broaden her horizons and to study and work further elsewhere out of Taiwan. She has been a pleasure to work with and quickly rose to a position of seniority within her ward. She has consistently attended many course in ICU specifically, as well as other necessary courses. She is well respected and liked by her peers and the doctors have found her to be willing, able and a model for the new persons joining the staff.

Ms Nien\'s leaving is a loss for our hospital but a gain for wherever she may go. I wish her well in her endeavours and trust that she may return one day to her native country further experienced iher chosen vocation.

Yours sincerely

PS:第一封推薦者為加護病房醫師 第二位則為護理長

PS:如果我和該位醫師起起出去受訓,如至臺大醫院受器官移植訓練可以加進去嗎?如是可行的 又該如何加入呢?

Update:

thank you so much, you help a lot.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    1.

    Second paragraph, the first line, change it to "Since", don't use "From". And second paragraph, 5th line: " she was not scare", change it to " she is not "scared".

    And don't use "Sincerely yours" at the conclusion. Use "Sincerely, " or "Yours truly, "

    2.

    "from 1999 till 2005" change to "since 1999 till now"

    "She has consistently attended many course in ICU" change to "many courses"

    "model for the new persons joining the staff. " it's "person" and joining the "staffs"

    Conclusion, not "Yours sincerely, " use "Yours truly," or "Sincerely,"

    that's about it. Are you writing a business letter?? You should use BPDOG

    B-Background P-purpose D-details O-Organizations G-Goodwill statement.

    In the end of each letters, u should "always" add Goodwill Statement.

    For example: Lastly, thank for spending your time reading this letter. I am very appreciated your consideration.

    I am not very good at this, so i might not find all the errors.

    And i hope she gets her new jobs.

    PS: I don't think this letter is well writen because this is a business letter. But i can feel how you express your feelings...so...goodluck..

    2006-01-24 05:29:33 補充:

    oh...wait...i made mistake.. I said "she is not scared", i meant "she was not scared".

    Source(s): memememememe..
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