(20點超急件)麻煩英文達人幫我修改一下此篇英文文章 .謝謝

The role play about a girl, Joyce who was fell so excited to be here at college and the other girl, Lily started getting homesick. Joyce is come form Changhua who depart from her family so far at the first time. Lily is come form Taipei whose family didn’t want her to go away to college. Lily’s parents trust her, but worried too much about her. Lily feels she is not as grown-up as she thought and confuses about the new area at college. Joyce is a girl who is independent and want help Lily make the adjustment. After told to Joyce about she can not adapted to a new area Lily feel better already. In the end, they started study together.

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  • Genis
    Lv 6
    2 decades ago
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    * 完整翻譯在最底下

    The role play about a girl, Joyce who was fell so excited to be here at college and the other girl, Lily started getting homesick.

    * 不應該用"was fell",因為兩個都是動詞 (v.)

    * fell應該是felt (feel的過去式),因為Joyce是感到興奮

    * 意思是說 ... 這個故事是關於兩個女生 - Joyce跟Lily嗎?

    Joyce is come form Changhua who depart from her family so far at the first time.

    * "is come"是兩個動詞,二選一就好

    * 形容故事內容,可以用現在式

    * 前面用現在式的話,後面也要用現在式 (前後呼應)

    - Joyce comes from Changhua, and this is her first time away from home. [Joyce來自彰化,而且這次是她第一次離開家]

    Lily is come form Taipei whose family didn’t want her to go away to college.

    * is / come 二選一

    * 如果想用"whose"的話,應該把那個字放在Lily後面;現在的位置是說台北的家庭不想她想大學

    Lily’s parents trust her, but worried too much about her.

    * "worry" - 如果是動詞的話,應該用現在式;如果是形容詞,前面要加"are"

    - Although Lily's parents trust her, they worry too much about her. [雖然Lily的父母都相信她,他們卻過份擔心她]

    Lily feels she is not as grown-up as she thought and confuses about the new area at college.

    * 我猜這句的意思是:Lily覺得自己還不夠成熟,因為她很不習慣大學的新環境

    Joyce is a girl who is independent and want help Lily make the adjustment.

    * "indepedent girl"就好

    After told to Joyce about she can not adapted to a new area Lily feel better already.

    * cannot是一個字

    * 適應可以用"get used to"

    * 前面已經有說明Lily對新環境不適應,所以不必再重複

    In the end, they started study together.

    * start跟study都是動詞,只能有一個「主角」,另外一個要當配角:前面加"to"或者把動詞變成進行式 => start to study 或 start studying

    * 我猜這句的意思是:從此以後,她們開始一起唸書? (變成好朋友)

    完整篇:

    The story is about two girls - Joyce, who is very excited about attending college, and Lily, who is getting homesick. Joyce comes from Changhua, and this is her first time away from home. Lily, whose family does not want her to attend college, comes from Taipei. Although Lily's parents trust her, they worry too much about her. Lily feels that she's not mature enough because she's not used to the new environment. Joyce is an independent girl that she wants to help Lily getting used to the life in college. After telling Joyce about her problem, Lily feels a lot better. Since then, they become good friends.

    Source(s): 個人意見
  • 2 decades ago

    The story is about two girls, Joyce and Lily. Joyce is very excite about attending college, and Lily is getting homesick. Joyce comes from Changhua, and this is her first time away from home. Lily, whose family did not agree with her on attending college, comes from Taipei. Lily's parents trust Lily will be able to take care herself, but on the other hand, they still can not stop worry about her. Lily feels that she is not as grown-up as she thought she was, because she is still not use to the new environment. On the other hand, Joyce is much more independent than Lily, after hearing about Lily's problem, Joyce had decided to help Lily to get use to the new college life. Since then, Joyce and Lily has become good friends.

    上面的翻譯翻的不錯,我做了一些修改,希望對你幫助!

  • 2 decades ago

    One of the roles is Joyce, an excited girl to get to college, and the other is Lily, who was getting homesick. Joyce who comes from Changhua was for the frist time to the place away from home. On the other hand, Lily, comes form Taipei, whose family didn't want her to attend the distant college. Though her parents let her go eventually, they still worried about her very much. Then, Lily was confused with the new environment at college. She wondered if she was not mature enough. On the contray, Joyce was so independent that she wanted to help Lily with her difficulty. She told Lily that she had the same feeling with the new college life. In this way, Lily gradually felt better. In the end, they became good friends and studied together.

    (不知道說的是什麼故事, 只能憑感覺和句意來改, 可能有點改過頭了, 請自行斟酌刪減)

  • 北北
    Lv 7
    2 decades ago

    The role play about a girl, Joyce who was fell so excited to be here at college and the other girl, Lily started getting homesick. Joyce is come form Changhua who depart from her family so far at the first time. Lily is come form Taipei whose family didn’t want her to go away to college. Lily’s parents trust her, but worried too much about her. Lily feels she is not as grown-up as she thought and confuses about the new area at college. Joyce is a girl who is independent and want help Lily make the adjustment. After told to Joyce about she can not adapted to a new area Lily feel better already. In the end, they started study together.

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