英文高手,幫我看看是否有誤,謝謝(英文信)

Dear Ms.XXX: Hello, teacher, my name is XXX. I appreciate you to give me the chance to write the letter. Besides, let’s learn to how to write an English letter and enrich my knowledge. Now, I will introduce me to you. My idol is 賴東進,because he is strong and brave. His father, mother and younger brother... show more Dear Ms.XXX:
Hello, teacher, my name is XXX. I appreciate you to give me the chance to write the letter. Besides, let’s learn to how to write an English letter and enrich my knowledge.
Now, I will introduce me to you. My idol is 賴東進,because he is strong and brave.
His father, mother and younger brother all have deficiencies. When 賴東進 is a litter boy ,he need to go begging alms with his older sister and care of family.
What I admire the most is that he bored in so poor family and people usually looked at family with scorn, he did not abandon oneself. And he got many commend; the article is worth reading.Thanks for your reading this poor English letter.
Update: 如果Hello改成How do you do 好嗎
Update 2: 是否How are you? 也可以呢
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