annye asked in 社會與文化語言 · 2 decades ago

請幫我看一下這篇文章還有哪裡可以改進的?(請不要跟我說文章已

When diet is concerned, I’m an opinion that it’s healthy to eat more vegetable and fruit. Due to our society is become more and more wealthy, many people get fat. I consider that it’s because they eat too much meat, judging from the elder generation, it’s hardly to find anyone who is overweight. In that, the meat is too expensive to them, so they’re a little healthy. We can’t eat meat for a long time, or we’ll become very weak.

No matter what, in order to get enough nutrition, we have better eat both meat and vegetable. If we can carry out these points mentioned above, we must be healthy ever after.

Update:

P.S這不是作業喔!

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  • Anonymous
    2 decades ago
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    When diet is concerned, my opinion is that it is healthier to eat more vegetable and fruit.

    The wealthier our society becomes, the fatter people get.

    I think it is because that they eat too much meat.

    When thinking about the old generation, it is hard to find overweight people.

    At that time, meat was so expensive that they could not afford it.

    Thus, they ate a little healthier.

    We cannot eat meat every meal, or we will become very weak.

    In order to get enough nutrition, it is better to eat both meat and vegetable.

    If we can really practice what had mentioned above, we will stay healthy.

  • 2 decades ago

    I’m an opinion that it’s healthy to eat more vegetable and fruit.

    應該是 in my opinion...... 吧?

    I consider that it’s because they eat too much meat, judging from the elder generation, it’s hardly to find anyone who is overweight.

    這一句蠻奇怪的 翻成中文不太順

    judging from the elder generation這一句是補充 但是跟前後兩具有點不搭

    再來你第一句說 因為他們吃太多 第三句又說 很難找到體重過重的人

    蠻奇怪的 文意不合

    In that, the meat is too expensive to them, so they’re a little healthy.

    這一句的them應該只的是上一待的人 但是 你這樣寫 會使人搞不清楚

    we have better eat both meat and vegetable

    應該改成 we had better 我們最好....

    自己的作業要自己寫喔

    Source(s): 自己
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