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The Nice Trip Last Summer

I took an unforgettable trip with my family last summer. It was so impressive that I remember it very well. Because my uncle and auntie are the members of the club named 馬武督, they invited us to go there together.

It was a gloomy morning that day, but it didn’t lower our excitement at all. We set up early so that we could avoid traffic jams. It took us three hours to get there. When we arrived the destination, my uncle, auntie and two cousins ran toward us to welcome us. What a warm and fragrant beginning!

We played many interesting facilities in every theme park there, such as arrow shooting, mini-bowling, rock climbing, maze, mini theater and so on. Among all the things I played, swimming and sauna are my favorites. As a student, it is almost impossible for me to spare time for exercise. To keep me in shape and make me healthier, I swam as many as runs as possible.

When it was time for us to leave, we were very reluctant. My auntie asked us to stay longer, but we had to go back home actually. My father and mother had to go to work the next day, and I had to go to cram school too. We said goodbye and then we got into the car for our return journey. When we arrived home, we were tired and sleepy, but we were still happy. We all agreed that it was a nice trip.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    I took an unforgettable trip with my family last summer. It was so impressive that I (still) remember it very well. Because my uncle and auntie are the members of the club named 馬武督, they invited us to go there together.

    It was a gloomy morning that day, but it didn’t lower our ('spirit' is a better word here) at all. We set (off) early so that we could avoid traffic jams. It took us three hours to get there. When we arrived (at) the destination, my uncle, auntie and two cousins ran toward us to welcome us. What a warm (welcome)!

    We (enjoyed) many interesting facilities in (the) theme park there, such as arrow shooting, mini-bowling, rock climbing, maze, mini theater and so on. Among all the things I played, swimming and sauna (were) my favorites. As a student, it is almost impossible for me to spare (my) time for any exercise. To keep me in shape and make me healthier, I swam as many (delete 'as' here) runs as possible.

    When it was time for us to leave, we were very reluctant. My auntie asked us to stay longer, but we had to go back home (use 'unfortunately' is better than actually). My father and mother had to go to work the next day, and I had to go to cram school too. We said goodbye and then we got into the car for our return journey. When we arrived (at) home, we were tired and sleepy, but we were still happy. We all agreed that it was a nice trip.

    I made the corrections in ( ).

    2005-08-16 03:06:31 補充:

    『威威 』:

    You need to change it to my uncle and MY auntie....

    Swimming as many LAPS as possible

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  • Anonymous
    6 years ago

    我一直都有過敏狀況,是最近才知道要用防螨寢具的,因為醫師建議我用,我也考慮了很久,想說要買就買最好的,上個月趁網站有折扣的時候買了一組【北之特】防蹣(螨)寢具來用用看,真沒想到~~現在覺得過敏狀況有改善多了。雖然比一般的貴一些,不過~真值得!

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  • 1 decade ago

    第二段的set up 你是不是想打get up啊?

    我記得set up 的意思是建立;提出

    好像跟文意不太合....

    Source(s): 台大外文系
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