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Anonymous asked in 社會與文化語言 · 1 decade ago

幫我訂正一下作文好嗎......

Doing Exercise

Doing exercise is a good activity. It can make you healthier and happier physically and mentally. It not only wastes little time, but also doesn't take much space. There are many kinds of exercises in the world, including badminton, basketball, baseball, golf, bowling, aerobics, and kungfu. The most favorite sport which I like is swimming. Swimming not only can make your gain good shape and make you energetic. I just like to relax all of my muscle and sink into the water without anything. At that time, I hypothesis that I am a fish and the whole ocean is my home. Sometime, I spend my time at my community swimming pool at dawn. Because, nobody bothers me at that time. Now, I am a worker without much leisure time to go to swimming. Nevertheless, I still go swimming on the weekend, and sometimes invite friends to go skiing, or diving at the coast. The reason for that is swimming a part of my life.

Nowadays, many people who have a good life are getting fatter and fatter. A few people like to do something about exercise. Their body is getting weaker and weaker. Come on! If you wish for a healthier life, do some sports maybe is a good way!

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    第一行...physically and mentally.=>not only physically but also mentally.

    第二行It not only wastes little time, but also doesn't take much space.

    =>It takes little time,and it doesn't take much space.

    第三行There are many kinds of exercises,including...kungfu.=>There are many kinds of sports such as...kung fu.

    第四行The most favorite sport which I like is swimming.

    =>My favorite sport is swimming.

    Swimming not only can make your gain good shape and make you energetic.

    =>Swimming can make you not only in good shape but also energetic.

    第六行... sink into the water...=>...sink below the water...

    ... I hypothesis that I am a fish and the whole ocean is my home.

    =>...I will think as if I were a fish and that the whole ocean were my home.

    第七行Sometime, I spend my time at my... . Because, nobody bothers me....

    =>Sometimes,I spend my time in the... ,because no one will bother me....

    第八行... leisure time to go to swimming.

    =>...free time to go swimming.

    第十行... or diving at the coast.

    =>...or go diving in the sea.

    ...The reason for that is ...

    =>...The reason is that...

    第十一行...many people who have a good life ...

    =>...many people who lead a good life...

    ...A few people ...

    =>Few people...

    第十二行...Their body is ...

    =>...They are...

    第十三行...you wish for a healthier life, do some sports maybe is a good way!

    =>...you hope for health and happiness, doing exercise will give you a hand!

    改完了,這樣您滿意嗎?

    ps 搖旗吶喊:第一句並不怪,只是囉唆了一點,由筆者決定

    *♀大姐大~⊙ō⊙~ :kung fu叫做功夫,而takwondo叫做跆拳道,只是為其中一項,還 有太極拳shadow boxing喔!抱歉啦,我只是希望大家一起學習,互相幫忙啦!

    順便提醒你一兩個足以誤人一生的錯誤就好。首先... I hypothesis that I am a fish and the whole ocean is my home.錯誤的原因是詞性錯誤,hypothesis為名詞,亞佛加厥"假說"才用這個字,不要被中文意思假設誤導了,還要使用假設法喔!另外on the weekend 是對的,你說的是on weekends,其他我不管了。

    搖旗吶喊 ,*♀大姐大~⊙ō⊙~:The most favorite sport which I like is swimming.文意表達有問題,文法也有問題,原意應為"我最喜歡的運動是游泳"

    favorite叫做"最喜歡"而且一定是筆者最喜歡,要接"My",不必多加"most最"或"I like我喜歡",至於文法,如果一定要用which的話,應這麼說:

    The sport which I like most is swimming.

    ♠♣ Joker™ ♣♠Thanks for reminding me, I ignored it, I just copied the word from*♀大姐大~⊙ō⊙~ . Also,I argee what you said.

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  • 小J
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    害人不淺,回去面壁思過吧@@"

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    對不起 因為我的作文讓大家吵架了 >_<

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  • Jango
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago

    探天 you spelled "taekwondo" wrong and you should say "MY FAVORITE SPORT IS SWIMMInG" isn't this a more common saying

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  • 1 decade ago

    It can make you healthier and happier physically and mentally

    這句怪怪的 建議你可以把physically and mentally拿掉

    The most favorite sport which I like is swimming

    改成The sport which I like very much is swimming

    或The most favorite sport is swimming

    A few people like to do something about exercise.

    改成Fewer and fewer people like to do something about exercise.

    因為A few 有肯定的意思

    Source(s): 淺見...不對請指教
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