阿蛙
Lv 4
阿蛙 asked in 社會與文化語言 · 2 decades ago

幫忙修改作文

各位英文好ㄉ大大們

可否幫忙修該此篇作文ㄋ~

若有錯的地方懇請修改補充說明唷~

謝謝~^^

Three special places

Everyone who has his prefer places and either have I. These three places which

I like has each different means to me. They are bookstore, department store and park.

Now let me tell you why I like them.

The first place I like is bookstore. I go once a week. I like reading books which I

am interested or not. Therefore, I can read the latest books, magazines or novels there

and have free air-conditioner. But the most important reason I like to go there are

always something new that made me surprised and caught my eyes.

The second place is department store. I live in the downtown so I go to each of

them once a month. I like buying product after window shopping each of department

stores. As a result, I can usually buy the cheapest one from all of them.

The third place I like to go is park. I go once to two weeks. There are trees,

flowers and big playground there. It’s cool to read a book under the tree of the park in

the afternoon. In addition, people who has dogs would took them to the park to play

with other dogs. It’s a place that can relax yourself and play with your pets.

When I have free time, my habit is go to the bookstore first, department store

second and park final. It’s so satisfied after going one by one.

Update:

To:...sun ( 實習生 4 級 )

謝謝您~但我想我還需加強說~^^|||

To:Egghead ( 初學者 1 級 )

不好意思~因為是第一次請大大們幫忙修改指證作文~因此不知道該給多少分來答謝說~但下次的話一定會從10分以上起跳答謝了~!

不過還是希望能夠自己寫~降子才能知道錯在哪邊才能說

Update 2:

To:Egghead

但還是感謝您的指導囉~^^

4 Answers

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  • Cacr
    Lv 6
    2 decades ago
    Favorite Answer

    其實寫得蠻不錯,至少意思都表達得很清楚

    Three special places

    Everyone who has his prefer places and either have I.

    (Everyone has his preferred places and so have I)

    1. 只有一句的時候不用加who 啦,加who是為了在主句子外解釋某名詞或事件時用的

    2. either 是用在"都不是"的情況下的

    These three places which I like has each different means to me.

    (These three places I like, have their own meanings to me.)

    1. mean (意義)是動詞,用作名詞時是中位數的意思,要用動名詞 meaning 改為名詞

    They are bookstore, department store and park.

    (They are bookstores, department stores and parks.)

    1. countable noun在提及時要用眾數或加冠詞the,加the 指特定某一間的意思

    Now let me tell you why I like them.

    The first place I like is bookstore. I go once a week.

    (The first place I like is the bookstore, I go there once a week.)

    I like reading books which I am interested or not.

    (I like reading books no matter I am interested in or not.)

    Therefore, I can read the latest books, magazines or novels there

    and have free air-conditioner.

    (I can read the latest books, magazines or novels there with free air-conditioning.)

    1. Therefore 是"因此",連上一句是"你喜歡看書因此你可以在那兒看書、雜誌...",怪怪的吧?

    2. air-conditioner 是冷氣機,air-conditioning 是冷氣,那兒不會有免費冷氣機派發吧

    But the most important reason I like to go there are

    always something new that made me surprised and caught my eyes.

    (The most important reason that I like to go there is there are

    always somehing new that makes me surprise and catches my eyes.)

    1. 沒事怎麼用了過去式?

    The second place is department store.

    (The second place is the department store.)

    I live in the downtown so I go to each of them once a month.

    I like buying product after window shopping each of department stores.

    (I like buying products after window shopping at each of the department store.)

    As a result, I can usually buy the cheapest one from all of them.

    The third place I like to go is park. I go once to two weeks.

    (The third place I like to go is the park. I go there once in two weeks.)

    1.你應該是說兩星期去一次吧? 一星期去一至兩次是 once to twice a week

    There are trees, flowers and big playground there.

    (There are trees, flowers and big playgrounds there.)

    It’s cool to read a book under the tree of the park in the afternoon.

    In addition, people who has dogs would took them to the park to play

    with other dogs.

    (In addition, people who have dogs would take them to the park to play

    with other dogs.)

    1. people 永遠是眾數 (always plural)

    It’s a place that can relax yourself and play with your pets.

    (It's a place that you can relax yourself and play with your pets.)

    When I have free time, my habit is go to the bookstore first,

    department store second and park final.

    (When I have free time, I will go to the bookstore,

    then the department store and finally the park.)

    It’s so satisfied after going one by one.

    (It’s so satisfying after going to these three places one by one.)

  • 2 decades ago

    都沒有錯ㄚ!

    寫得很好嚕!!

    P.S不過有個地方怪怪的~可能是我想太多了吧!!

    Source(s): me
  • ?
    Lv 7
    2 decades ago

    二級不要那樣小氣,丟個15點有人會幫你改,丟個20點幫你重寫的人都有了。

    2005-06-10 18:36:04 補充:

    反正又沒真的收錢,好玩啦。

  • Anonymous
    2 decades ago

    寫得很好..沒什麽錯..不需要改

    很專業了

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