不知道是不是寫的很爛?

麻煩幫我看一下大概是什麼樣的英文程度~

可不可以幫我看一下那裡寫的怪怪的~

About Alaska

I love Alaska. The main reasons are as follows. First of all, Alaska is biggest

state in American and the weather is very cold all the year. In addition, there is

wonderful glacier, mountains, trees and beautiful natural scenes. Moreover,

sightseeing industry is the second golconda in Alaska that every year come to

Alaska's tourist exceed 1.3million. The 80% tourists visit here in the summer.

Summer activity includes camping, fishing, mountain climbing, salmon admiring

, beautiful scene sightseeing, wildlife’s observation, stroll museum –Anchorage

Historical & Fine Arts Museum, fossick in the Chicken town. By the way, the

seafood - salmon is very famous, many tourists said that the taste is good and

quite delicious. Winter can fish on ice, dog pulls ski, skee, look aurora and ice

sculpture, etc. Furthermore, I would like to look into a distance from sky in

Diminutive aeroplane. The beautiful scenery can widen my horizon, but it is

expensive. For example, different start off line has different price that a person

from Denali National Park to leave need US$195. In conclusion, I have never

been to another country. If I make enough money, I will have a trip in Alaska

which is one of my favorite area. Last but not least, I have to learning English

work hard for conversation with foreign.

Update:

文法錯誤部分也請指教!Thanks a lot.

Update 2:

Furthermore, I would like to look into a distance from sky in

Diminutive aeroplane.]

我的意思是:我想搭輕航機從高空眺望~

(這樣寫對嗎?)

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  • 1 decade ago
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    不錯啊! 只有一些不小心的錯誤~

    文章尚算通順, 解釋得蠻清楚的!

    加油!

    I love Alaska. The main reasons are as follows: first of all, Alaska is (the) biggest

    state in (America, ) and the weather is very cold all the year. (Additionally), there (are)

    wonderful glacier, mountains, trees and beautiful natural scenes. Moreover,

    sightseeing industry is the second golconda in Alaska. (Every year, there are more than 1.3 million tourists come to Alaska. Among them, there are) 80% visit in the summer.

    Summer (activities include) camping, fishing, mountain climbing, salmon admiring

    , beautiful scene sightseeing, wildlife’s observation, stroll museum –Anchorage

    Historical & Fine Arts Museum (and) fossick in the Chicken town. (Also), the

    seafood - salmon is very famous, many tourists said that (the salmon tastes good) and

    quite delicious. (我覺得"taste good" 或 "quite delicious", 兩者取一就可以了)(During winter, dogs pull skiis, and people) can fish on ice, skee, look aurora and ice , and sculpture, etc. [Furthermore, I would like to look into a distance from sky in

    Diminutive aeroplane.] (<--我不太明白^^") The beautiful scenery can widen my horizon, but it is

    expensive. For example, different start off line has different price that a person

    from Denali National Park to leave need US$195. In conclusion, I have never

    been to another country. If I make enough money, I will have a trip (to) Alaska

    (where) is one of my favorite (places). Last but not least, I have to (work hard on learning English so as to communicate with foreigns).

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