Are these songs wonderful? Best answer 10pts?

These songs are really about whats going on in my life. DHDM is about my best friend Julia who I have a crush on. She rejected me and shes going out with this other snobby guy, and i want her to ditch him and date me! YSBaR is about another girl I like named Gianna and i dedicated that song to her: 1) Ditch Him,... show more These songs are really about whats going on in my life. DHDM is about my best friend Julia who I have a crush on. She rejected me and shes going out with this other snobby guy, and i want her to ditch him and date me! YSBaR is about another girl I like named Gianna and i dedicated that song to her:

1) Ditch Him, Date Me - Donald Simmons

So I set you up with him
My chances of getting you were slim
You shouldn’t be with him, be with me
You’ll be my top priority
Not a minority
He’s just your rebound, your debris, and
I think you should (Chorus)

Truth is, I want you
And to you, I’ll be true
You’ve been my best friend, confidante
And that you’re radiant just like a debutante
And I want you can be mine, so (Chorus)

Why are you with someone snobby and stuck up?
I really do think you two will break up
And after you are free
Come to someone who can treat you right
Come to me and you’ll be alright
If you just (Chorus)

Ditch Him, Date Me
Our love will be in headlines just like
The stars of Glee
We’ll be on a sitcom
And I’ll be the star
You’ll be my sidekick
‘Cause you have creative shtick
Just like when we were friends (Chorus)

So let’s repeat that, but as a couple
It’ll be great
Just like a double date
And we can go and skate


2) You're So Radiant and Beautiful – Donald Simmons – 1-8-2011


You're so radiant and beautiful
That even Angelina Jolie can't touch you
On 10 foot pole
Even if she tried using a rubber sole

You're so amazingly striking
That when we're walking
On a cloudy day, I steal a kiss from you
And its so true

And why are you so radiant and beautiful?
And even a cuticle
can't touch you
I ask myself about your radiance everyday

You're such a catch
That when I look at you I can't even stretch
If birds are near I tell them to shoo
That's how much I'm distracted by you

Oh you're so dazzling and
Every time we talk I daydream over you
I tell myself I'm in love
And I'm gonna count the ways

1,2 you’re so sweet
3,4 I think you’re a great treat
5,6 we can get through any feat (together)
7,8 now just fall back and have a seat

If they're not awesome what can i do to improve them? I'll answer your question if anyone has one
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