Wrote a song on starting a new life?

Moving On In The Dawn -- Donald Simmons You were with him, said you wanted him out To agree with me on my negative view on him You got a restraining order on him, yet your out and about The chances you won’t go to jail are slim (Refrain) Mom i think since I’m in high school I should get out of here Since... show more Moving On In The Dawn -- Donald Simmons

You were with him, said you wanted him out
To agree with me on my negative view on him
You got a restraining order on him, yet your out and about
The chances you won’t go to jail are slim (Refrain)

Mom i think since I’m in high school I should get out of here
Since you lied to my face, said you wanted him gone
But you still love him, consider him so dear
Your forced to choose, either him or I (Refrain)

Refrain
Mom you treat me like I'm nonexistent
Leave me home daily, hours at a time
When I should be a top priority, leave your ex, from him be distant
But to leave him you say would be like leaving the scene of a crime
And I hate that you ain't so resistant

I told my school about your alleged other
The things he did to me, got away with at home
So they called out for help, like a child with his older brother
And it's great the ex doesn't call my phone
I wouldn't answer anyway, I'm not supporting my mother (Refrain)

I'm going to get out of here, this place called New Jersey
Move to Florida and live with my aunt
She has a good husband, ain't being abused, begging for mercy
I'll uproot myself from here, I'm being safe and in my life I know what I want (Refrain)

Your alleged ex has court on the twenty first
The police postponed it, you got your wish
Now I hope you're in jail for a long time, cause karma's properly dispersed
You don't deserve freedom, you're sneaky as a fish
You manipulate mom, you make her immersed to you
What she needs to do is detach from you, like a stitch (Refrain)

The saddest part is I leave next Friday
I want to leave tomorrow but i cannot
Like Frank Sinatra, I wish this thing went My Way
I know it's not but i wish it did a lot
Like JFK and Miss Bouvier I wish he didn't get shot that day (Refrain)

Is it great? If it isn't then how can i improve it?
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