Is this a great song? I gave it my all?

Well I'm a guy in high school and bisexual. And I live around homophobes. so my homophobic cousin came over my apartment and I cane out to him in front of his friend whos a year younger than me. (Who I happen to have a crush on) And today is my 15th birthday but the incident made me depressed so I decided to... show more Well I'm a guy in high school and bisexual. And I live around homophobes. so my homophobic cousin came over my apartment and I cane out to him in front of his friend whos a year younger than me. (Who I happen to have a crush on)
And today is my 15th birthday but the incident made me depressed so I decided to write a song about it to make me feel better but it hasn't; it's called Tory and Joe.

**My cousins name is Tory**
**The friend I like is Joe**


Tory and Joe – Donald Simmons

I feel like crying
Because of what you did, and said
I feel like sighing
I’ve no one to talk to, I feel like lead
Yet I keep trying
To hold my feelings within, in my eyes Tory you’re dead
(Chorus)

Tory I came out to you
But like one who’s depressed you hurt me
Inside I tried moving on, not be blue
But then you made fun of me, and I see
I can never open up to you, and be true
(Chorus)

Chorus
I have a crush on Tory’s guy friend
His friend Joe’s very charming and nice to me
Yet on Joe you emotionally depend
To maintain your stability
You want to become something, ascend
When you have only fakeness and act silly

Bridge
I don’t even know how Joe feels
About the ordeal
Yet I have hope he _____ (I need an end rhyme to go in the blank)
I wish I could stop time, tell him how I feel
Because he’s my world and I won’t let a girl steal
Him away from me

Repeat chorus 2 times
End song

Btw my question about the incident is here if anyone wants to answer it: http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AsayYtXSyQZ7rJhGckIK_pTsy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20110824215931AAGI4VH
Update: No, Joe doesn't know I like him angel. My homophobic cousins are here with me and Joe's here too. How can I tell him in private?
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