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My World in 5 Stories - Donald Simmons Why is my world crashing down? Like the town I’m living in And why do I want to drown? I just wanna go for a spin This was Story 1 (Refrain) Life never seemed so awful, so scary I want to run every day, get away, Just like Bloody Mary I feel sad, unloved by... show more My World in 5 Stories - Donald Simmons

Why is my world crashing down?
Like the town I’m living in
And why do I want to drown?
I just wanna go for a spin
This was Story 1 (Refrain)

Life never seemed so awful, so scary
I want to run every day, get away,
Just like Bloody Mary
I feel sad, unloved by night, but ugly by day
Why won’t a girl take me in her arms? Sad? Very.
This was Story 2 (Refrain)

Refrain

Why is my life so sad
Why am I so blue?
I should be feeling glad
Like Nancy Drew when she solves a mystery
And shes upbeat cause she went down in history--books.

I’m failing math right now
But I wanna do better
But math, to you I wanna take a bow
I wanna step up from wearing my blue sweater
Keep me in that class so I can see my best friend/crush
Because she’s who I’m dreaming of
This was Story 3 (Refrain)

My mom’s dating again after 20 years
But I think her boyfriend might be using her
I do have some strange, odd fears
Just like a woman using her mink, a flashy fur
And mom’s being so irresponsible
This was story 4 (Refrain)

I’m so depressed in my life
I can’t get girls, I’m failing math
And I just wanna have a wife
And relieve my stresses, have a warm bath
I hope life gets better for me.
This was story 5 (Refrain)

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