Is this a great song I wrote?

I wrote this song about my crush Victoria. I wanted it to have a tempo and style of George Harrison's song "Yesterday" and also a tempo/style like The Fugees' "Ready or Not". I'm in high school btw Victoria You're so beautiful in every way Just like sunset along the dock of... show more I wrote this song about my crush Victoria. I wanted it to have a tempo and style of George Harrison's song "Yesterday" and also a tempo/style like The Fugees' "Ready or Not". I'm in high school btw

Victoria
You're so beautiful in every way
Just like sunset along the dock of the bay
I know we're still friends, but
We can take it to the next level
Kiss in a glass hut
I just don't know how to express my feelings for you
Victoria (Refrain)

In the hallway we joke and laugh
You called me and I answered
Just like someone needs assistance writing an epitaph
But it's not as extreme as writing the British Hansard (Refrain)

We’ve been friends since the first day of school
And I’ve had feelings for you I’m too nervous to explain
I think of myself as a tool, and you too cool (that you don’t deserve me)
If i ask you out I don’t want rejection, hurt and pain
Why?

Because you are my best friend, and the most beautiful girl in the world
And looking at you is like looking at Princess Di, there’s no other alibi
Your hair and your gorgeous face make me think “her beauty is unfurled”
You’re also so gorgeous you don’t even have to try
Why? (Refrain)

We could have so much chemistry together
And like Lena Horne get through the stormy weather
We can flock together like birds of a feather
And your skin’s so smooth like a seat made of leather
That i just can’t express your true beauty without kissing you first
Why? (Refrain)

When we talk and laugh
Just like Lucy Ricardo as a housewife on the right path
We reach the climax of our equation in math: D=V cubed
There’s only one of me
But I multiply you by three
Why? (Refrain)
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