Would you read a story like this?

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I'm giving you like the ending of chap. 1 and beginning of chap. 2


Sarah was calling my cell phone.
"Hello!"
"Hey, Were almost there, you should see our plane in a sec. I'm so excit... what?... uh.... Hey Megan I gotta go. Bye."
"Okay. Bye."
Amanda gave me a funny look. "Who was that?" she said.
"Sarah... but it seemed like something was wrong." I replied.
"Oh, well they should be here soon so nothing to worry about right?"
"Thats what she said." I said in a worried tone. Then out of the corner of my eye I saw their little yellow plane just off of the horizon. I pointed it out to Amanda and we both started running towards the dock waving our arms around. When we got to the end of the dock I could see Sarah through her window and she looked really scared and she was beating on it. Then I realized what was going on, the plane wasn't headed for the dock anymore. It was starting to bounce and had smoke coming from its engine. I immediatly, without thinking, jumped into the water and started swimming towards where it was. I could feel Amanda jump in behind me. I just kept swimming and the plane hit the water and was bouncing on it farther and farther away. The next thing I knew one of the bounces, bounced it nose first into the water and it started to sink. I quickly swam towards it using all the energy I could. Sarah had managed to knock the glass out of her window and I grabbed her hand. Right now I wasn't to worried about Amanda even though I should have been because she can't handle that much use of energy, she could be drowning right now, but 2 seconds later I saw her grab Tim's hand and pull him out of the plane. We started swimming to the surface, carrying Sarah was like carrying dead weight. Oh God! Please dont let Sarah be dead. I felt a huge vibration in the water and saw below me smoke and sand flying up everywhere. The plane had finally crashed and I was running out of air. I could see the surface ahead of me and pushed myself on knowing that I could make it. We reached it. I pulled Sarah up and she took a huge gasp of air coming out of the water and passed out. I could see Amanda struggling with Tim below me and I went down and helped her pull him up. When we got up he was consious but was in shock. I looked around and saw that we had swam a long way from our island. I had never swam that hard or fast before. I guess when you'd do anything to keep your friends alive adrenaline can make you do some crazy stuff. We were floating near a small island that was just across from ours and we knew we couldn't make it back to our own island so we carried them to the smaller one, hoping that when we got there we could get some help. we pulled them both onto the shore and Sarah laid there like she was dead and Tim just sat up and looked at the ocean. I could tell Sarah wasn't breathing and so could Amanda. I started CPR. I held her nose and opened her mouth and breathed in. Then I pumped her heart 3 times. Water suddenly spurted out of her mouth and she shot up and took a huge gasp of air like she was coming back to life. Next thing I knew she had her arms wrapped around me in a hug and she started sobbing. Tim looked over at us and then stood up and walked back towards the jungle and stood at its edge.
"You know guys," He said in a strangly calm voice for someone who was in shock. "I know we just got here and save me and Sarah, and then Sarah again, but we have a bigger problem on our hands now."
"What?" Amanda asked.
"Were stuck on this island with no way off and no way to contact people." He turned around and looked out towards our island and then I truely realized how far away it was. Nobody would even know we were here.
"Well, I guess we'll just had to find our own way off wont we." I said hoping somebody would agree.
"I guess so." Sarah said with tearfilled eyes.
"I'm in." Said Amanda. And then we all looked at Tim.
"What!" He said. "I guess we could try. But you all know its going to be dangerous. I mean they said were weren't allowed in the jungle over there," He pointed to the island. "Because of wild creatures. Then it will be even worse over here where there isn't any people."
"We know." The three girls said together.

Chapter 2
Now, finding our own way off the island was harder than you think, we couldn't just build a raft and sail away. Trust me we tried. It was hard enough finding the right materials to buil one big enough and strong enough to hold four people and then we discovered that when you put it into the water the little creases in the wood just made it slowly cover with water and sink. So that was out. We also tried getting someone to see us from the beach by, waving our arms at people on the island. They coudn't see us. we also tried writing S.O.S. on the beach in big letters and setting it on fire but the beach was so small as soon as we got it lit the water washed over it like it never happened. We tried to build a big bon fire and of course the water also put th

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Make you you read at the top where I said. "Its the end of Chapter 1 and the beginning of Chapter 2. And dont correct me on my grammer. I just wrote it today and haven't edited it yet. Just comment on the story itself

Answer 1

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LOL - I love the way some people answer questions here.

Grammar mistakes do not define talent. I liked the story! You've got a good start here. Grammar and spelling can be learned. Combine that with a good imagination and you've got a great story. Keep writing!

Answer 2

Lots of grammar mistakes, and I think the action started in right away (not a compliment.)