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In "The Story of an Hour" written by Kate Chopin, we are introduced to Mrs. Mallard at the moment she discovers her husband has been killed in a railroad disaster. Set in the early days when women had no identity and were inferior to their husbands, Mrs. Mallard feels as though she finally has her own voice and name in the world after her husband's passing. Chopin conveys Mrs. Mallard's emotions with nature’s symbolism to detail her mental state.
Chopin uses “new spring life” to describe Mrs. Mallard’s emotions also to introduce her new life as a person. Chopin depicts the setting as “she could see in the open square before her house the tops of trees that were all aquiver with the new spring life.” This illustrates her feelings as acceptance to the news she received about her husband and the experiences she went through with him have been put behind her. Chopin also describes the trees were all aquiver which signifies the quiver of all the suffering Mrs. Mallard had had with her husband. Spring represents the beginning of new life, which Chopin describes in the story.
Throughout the story the mental state Mrs. Mallard was in, was confusing. With such bad news Mrs. Mallard should have been very upset however towards the end of the story it was clear that her joy was difficult to hide. Chopin states “but she felt it, creeping out of the sky, reaching toward her through the sounds, the scents, the color that filled the air.” This shows that Mrs. Mallard was trying to keep her joy contained within her. Mrs. Mallard was about to realize the life she would live without her husband would be vastly different than the one she had experienced.
The sky is used to symbolize the characters feeling of confusion. Chopin articulates the color of the sky and the setting of them to present the characters emotions. The setting is “there were patches of blue sky showing here and there through the clouds that had met and piled one above the other in the west facing her window.” The patches of blue in the sky depict the confusion in Mrs. Mallard towards her feelings. The way Chopin describe that the clouds were piled one above another implies all Mrs. Mallard’s thoughts have come together and she was about to discover the conclusion to her future.
The symbolisms used in the story to describe the feelings of the character were used to imply confusion happiness and acceptance to the future. The description of them such as the colors that were used also the way it was set made her feelings apparent.

Answer 1

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Set in the early days when women...... (specify when, what time period? what "early days?" 1700's, 1800's? specify)

"Chopin conveys Mrs. Mallard's emotions with nature’s symbolism" change "with" to "using"

Chopin uses “new spring life” to describe Mrs. Mallard’s emotions (need a period here) (start a new sentence here) also to introduce her new life as a person.

depicts the setting as(need comma) “she could..... (always use a comma before a quotation)

feelings as (change to "of") acceptance

Chopin also describes the trees were all aquiver which signifies the quiver of all the suffering Mrs. Mallard had... (not a good interpretation. More likely she was "aquiver" with anticipation of the new life she would have. "aquiver" indicates excitement and anticipation.

setting is (need comma here again) “there were patches...

the mental state Mrs. Mallard was in,(don't need comma here) was confusing

imply confusion (need comma here) happiness and acceptance to the future.

The description of them such as the colors that were used also the way it was set made her feelings apparent. (re-write!)

suggestion: The description of the colors that were used as well as how the settings were described made her feelings apparent.

Pretty good job really. Good luck!

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English teacher.

Answer 2

It looks pretty good, but here are some minor changes I would make:

Chopin uses "new spring life" to describe Mrs. Mallard's emotions AND also to introduce her new life as a person.

This illustrates her feelings OF acceptance TOWARDS the news she received about her husband and the experiecnces she went through with him AND SHOWS THAT SHE HAS PUT THEM BEHIND HER.

Chopin also describes the trees AS BEING "AQUIVER", which signifies the quiver of all the suffereing Mrs. Mallard HAD with her husband.

Through the story, MRS. MALLARD'S MENTAL STATE WAS CONFUSING. With such bad news(comma) Mrs. Mallard should have been very upset (period) However(comma) towards the end of the story it was clear that her joy was difficult to hide.

Chopin articulates the color of the sky and the setting of (what? the story or the sky?) to present the characters emotions.

CHOPIN DESCRIBES THE SETTING AS "patches of blue sky showing here and there through the clouds that had met and piled one above the other in the west facing her window." The patches of blue in the sky depict the confusion MRS. MALLARD EXHIBITS TOWARD HER EMOTIONS. The way Chopin DECRIBES THE CLOUDS AS BEING PILED ONE ABOVE ANOTHER implies THAT all Mrs. Mallard's thoughts have come together and SHOWS THAT she was about to discover the conclusion to her future.

The symbolisms used in the story to describe the feelings of the MAIN character were used to imply confusion(comma) happiness and acceptance TOWARDS the future. The DESCRIPTION'S of them(comma) such as the colors that were used AND the way it was set(comma) made her feelings apparent.

If you don't like the changes, keep it the way it is.

Hope that helps!