Could someone proof my paper?

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i need this to be 3 pages or four so if you could add some stuff that would be wonderful. i need help with the quote areas so if you could improve those areas i would really appreshiate it thank you.






The Right for Respect

Times have changed since the late 1800’s. Women have come a long way in many different ways. Women have moved up in social and economical. Women have always had the intelligence and potential to be in powerful and influential positions. Yet, it was the expectations of society and oppression of men, which are exemplified by short stories such as “The Yellow Wallpaper” by Charlotte Perkins Gilman and “The Story of an Hour” by Kate Chopin of that era, which caused women to be weak for the longest time.
It used to be a Man’s world. During the late 1800’s, women were considered somewhat like possessions and were completely controlled and dominated by their husbands which is exemplified in “The Yellow Wallpaper”. “He is very careful and loving, and hardly lets me stir without special directions”. Society’s expectations of women were to be docile, sedentary, and domestic, as substantiated in “The Yellow Wallpaper”. “She is a perfect and enthusiastic housekeeper, and hopes for no better profession”. Women did not have outside professions or careers. If such a women did exist, it was rare. Women had little opportunity to be educated unless from a wealthy family. Even when educated, a woman was expected to give up her career to have a family. Some women were shunned or frowned upon when going against the expectations of society. There were women who wanted to do more. In Charlotte Perkins Gilman’s story “The Yellow Wallpaper”. The main female character in the story is practically imprisoned in her home. She has a maid, a nanny, a big house, a wonderful looking garden, and a rich husband. Yet, she is unable to do what she feels compelled to do which is to write, “He hates to have me write a word”. She slowly starts to go insane because she has no other way to have an outlet in life and writers. “If I were only well enough to write a little it would relieve the press of ideas and rest me”. The names of the other characters in the story are mentioned: John the husband, Jennie the caretaker, and Mary the nanny. However, the actual name of the main character is never mentioned. This fact alone shows that women, even the women of the house, is insignificant and there to please her man, Gilman states in the Yellow Wallpaper “ it (sickness) does weigh on me so not to do my duty in any way! I meant to be such help to john, such a real rest and comfort, and here I am comparative burden already”
Kate Chopin and Charlotte Perkins Gilman both were able to show that women could actually convince themselves to follow what their husband will even though it goes against what they truly feel and doubt themselves about their own identity and ideas. In the Yellow Wallpaper, Gilman writes, “he knows there is no reason to suffer and that satisfies him, he takes all care for me, and I feel so basely ungrateful not to value it more… he took me in his arms and called me blessed little goose,… he said I was his darling and comfort and all he had, and that I must care of myself for his sake, and keep well”. (Gilman 3). The main female character’s feelings are totally dismissed! In Chopin’s “Story of An Hour”, Louise almost couldn’t contain herself when she discovers that her husband was killed in the train wreck. Instead of weeping, she is in disbelief whispering, “Free! Body and Soul free!” (Chopin 2). How desperate for a human being to feel! Freedom, in Louise’s mind is a far- fetched idea.
In the grand view of things, these men did not intentionally repress and subordinate their wives. During those days it was typical for husbands to be the dominating figure of the house hold because society dictated it. Men are made superior and women do as they say and are to serve them. This is the rule of society and shows that women are a product of their time and it is society that determines that freedom for women was inappropriate. It is a more modern and confident man that allows his wife to venture outside of what society expects. It was up to the women themselves to make a change, become strong and lead independent lives. These were the times of change and free themselves form the perception of others as indicated by Gilmore in the Yellow Wallpaper, “I’ve got out at last…And I’ve pulled of most of the paper, so you can’t put me back!”
Chopin and Gilman wrote stories that helped society progress as a whole. Women were empowered to fulfill their needs and desires. Society is healthier when both men and women are able to be productive and fulfilled in what they do. It took women to take the initiative to change the rule of society.

Answer 1

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The sentences "Women have come a long way in many different ways. Women have moved up in social and economical.Women have always had the intelligence and potential to be in powerful and influential positions."
Have the same beginning.
You can either combine them or change up the beginning.

“She is a perfect and enthusiastic housekeeper, and hopes for no better profession”
I`m not sure if that`s a quote or what.
But you haven`t tied it to any of the sentences. And if you did you`d be better off using a semi-colon.

“If I were only well enough to write a little it would relieve the press of ideas and rest me”.

Once again, it might be a wise decision to tie this to a specific sentence or even as a topic or conclusion of a paragraph.

"This fact alone shows that women, even the women of the house, is insignificant..."
If I`m not incorrect it should be "are insignificant"

"This fact alone shows that women, even the women of the house, is insignificant and there to please her man, Gilman states in the Yellow Wallpaper “ it (sickness) does weigh on me so not to do my duty in any way! I meant to be such help to john, such a real rest and comfort, and here I am comparative burden already”

When is begins "Gilman states in the ..." That might ought to be a separate sentence.

John also needs to be capitlized.

The quote is a little confusing. I`m not sure what your trying to get across here.
“ it (sickness) does weigh on me so not to do my duty in any way! I meant to be such help to john, such a real rest and comfort, and here I am comparative burden already”

You could add some women like Rosa Parks, or other women that stood up for their rights.
You could even add some stories of women who ventured past what they were supposed to do and published books or something close to that.

Otherwise this a very well written essay or report.
I wish you luck on your grade!
I hope I helped!

With love and care,

Hannah<3

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Interest in women`s rights and an honors language class =)

Answer 2

Women rights have progress significantly over the past hundred years in America. Women have always had the potential, but where held back by the popular misconceptions about there roles and abilities of the times. Women have fought to move up in the economical and social status of what was once a man's world. A women's intelligences and importance was over looked because of societies oppressed views which where fueled by men. "The Yellow Wallpaper" by Charlotte Perkins Gilman and “The Story of an Hour” by Kate Chopin, are two short stories that reflect societies views on women before women rights where recognized. Women where viewed as being weak, fragile, and nothing more than help mates. Women fought long and hard for the simple rights that men enjoyed everyday. The world we know would be vastly different if not for the contribution as of many women.
During the 1800s women where treated more like possesion than they were as human beings. The 1800's was a mans world. The story " The Yellow Wallpaper" describes how women where controlled and submissive to there husbands. Women could not leave there husbands with out losing all there possesions. Women could not own land during this time, and therefore had no choice but to obey. A women was judged harshley for her inablilty to please her husband, and stigma was attached to divorce. A women had to cook, raise children, and not speak her opions about politics, war, or other "man" topics.

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Ok, I don't have time to read the whole paper. You should add about what women added to society. Look up contribuations in medical, politics and such. You can source those articles and make your paper longer by adding this.