How'd I do in my attempt to imitate Charles Bukowski?

Question

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Charity Work
Stephen Rodriguez

There was a dog that lived
outside my window
on the street.
It barked sometimes and shook its tail
at me.

It was a patchy dog like the kind you see
digging in the dirt
looking for some place to go.
But you know that it's got no place to go.

So I gave it a piece of meat and it
just looked at me asking
what makes this day any different.

It took the meat and ran off.

It'll get hit
sometime soon.
They all get hit sometime.

Answer 1

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Massive failure.

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I'm gonna have to go with you on this one.

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Answer 2

I'm tired of hearing about Charles Bukowski.

Answer 3

You're straying from your muse and
and sliding backward instead of improving.
How much of Bukowski's work have you read?
It's a long, hard, dirty, ugly road to where
Bukowski was when he wrote poetry.
You have your own road ahead of you.
Make the best of where ever it leads.
You get a VE for valiant effort.
 

Answer 4

You may suffer
'small man's syndrome'.

Nebraska is a tough place,
Ohio will be worse. Try
Nevada.

Source(s):

Corn & The Art Of Vespa Tinkering

Answer 5

You get marks for trying. My mother was a painter. Actually quite good, especially at copying. She never developed her own style though, although a dew drop on a rose did look like a dew drop. I would say to you to keep trying other styles but work on developing your own. That will in the end be the real determinant of your talent. Like him or not Bukowski was unique. Raw and in your face his words speak.

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You have talent, develop it more.

Answer 6

I see why you tried.
I've been reading him again lately.
Same thought, to mimic, has crossed my mind.
I probably won't though, mainly because of the shoes I wear.

But even so, any attempt, is a learning experience.