Does my writing suck?

Question

I'm writing this story and I want to know if it sucks.

Now I am a HUGE fan of criticism so please don't be afraid to speak your mind. No sugar coated comments. lol.

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It was late at night and Derek was exhausted, so exhausted that his eyelids were heavy and ready to close. He rubbed his eyes with his index finger and forced himself not to drift off into sleep. He had to stay up. He could not sleep. That was completely out of the question. There was a test tomorrow and he needed to study for it since he didn't study all week.

Cramming it all in at the last minute was Derek's personal strategy to success.

He turned a page over in his text book, seeing how the words were getting tinier and tinier as he continued to read. God this is pointless, Derek thought to himself as he rubbed his forehead. He hated studying and if he could he would never study in his life. However, he knew that if he didn't study he would surely fail that test which would ultimately lead to him faling his freshman year of college, and he couldn't afford that. Derek actually wanted to be successful in life.

He looked away from his text book and frowned. There was absolutely no one in the library at the moment - well there was a guy sitting on the floor while reading a magazine - but besides him, Derek was the only person there.
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Okay, I didn't post a lot, but that's because I don't want to bore anyone! I just would like to know how my sentence structure is.

Is my writing choppy and hard to read?

Answer 1

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker

much better than most of the inane drivel that i read on here, so please continue.

Asker's Rating:

Asker's Comment:

haha. Thanks.

Answer 2

not bad, seriously ;D

Answer 3

It's pretty good you pay huge attention to details the only part i don't like its the start i feel like your repeating your self but other than that keep it up!!