Is this a good introduction for my research paper?

Question

I have to write a 5 to 7 page research paper on the city of Paris, France. Covering its history, culture, wars, government, and more.

I just got done with the introduction, but I'm really not sure if it gives the right message. Does it defame the city I'm trying to do a report on? Does it sound horrible, or is it simply bad writing?

Here it is:

“America is my country, but Paris is my hometown” – Gertrude Stein
Upon hearing the name Paris, several things often come to mind: the City of Lights, City of Romance, the Eiffel Tower, corner bakeries full of fresh pastries and sidewalks lined with bistro tables, among other famously trite connotations. “Paris has been described so much” noted Baron de Pollnitz in 1732, “and one has heard it talked about so much, that most people know what the city looks like without ever having seen it”. Paris, France could often be perceived as a clichéd almost banal city to try and novelize in a single paper. “One never sees Paris for the first time” concurred Italian writer Edmondo de Amicis in the late nineteenth century, “one always sees it again…”. As these remarks lead us to believe, Paris cannot be visited or looked upon now without elevated expectation. Thus because of its popularity, it confines this prodigious city to simply berets and baguettes, when there’s so much more under the surface, if you as the reader are willing to delve deeper into the intriguing history of this vivid city.

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What would you change, add, or take out? Opinions?

Oh and I'm a senior in high school, just so you know.

Answer 1

too many quotes, write from yourself and when you use quotes, explain them!

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