Poll: What do you think of this?

Question

I had seen the white creature dance through the forest, so I informed the Kings and Queens.

They were more than delighted to be participating in a chase for the rare animal.

And I was more than willing to help in preparations.

As Peter, Susan, and Edmund had others aid them, I was left with my best friend – Queen Lucy.

Gazing at her beautiful hair, and seeing her smile in the sunlight, I knew ... I knew I loved her.

Butterflies had long ago grown in my stomach, and I knew they were fluttering mad in there.

All I could do was stare.

Just tell her, just tell her ...

She looked up at me.

She’s smiling.

Just say it ... say it ...

“Tumnus, you keep staring at me, is something on my face?”

It took a while for me to comprehend what had just come from her mouth. But shaking my head after seconds I replied, “No. Your face is perfect.”

A pink formed across her face, “Oh...thank you.”

I have to let it out, let it out ...

“Lucy, are you ready?”

I turned to see King Edmund on his horse.

“Oh, yes, I’m coming,” Lucy said getting ready to gallop away on another adventure.

While her siblings left the stables before me, I knew I had to say it ... it was now or never.

“Lucy ...”

She glanced back.

“I...I...lo...love you.”

She smiled. This was it!

“Oh Mr. Tumnus, I know today is April Fools. I’ll get you back for that.”

All hope had just vanished.

She thought I was joking!

I vowed I would tell her the truth when she returned.

Little did I know I would never get that chance.

The little Queen and her siblings had never returned.

And I was left with the regret of never telling her it was the truth.

I was left alone, with a broken heart, and three lifeless words.

Answer 1

Best Answer - Chosen by Voters

I was interested. At first it reminded me of Harry Potter. Sad ending, I liked it.

Answer 2

The Chronicles of Narnia.

Answer 3

Um...Queen Lucy's a bit young for you, Mr. Tumnus. Or shall I say, Mr. Chester.

Answer 4

too long & dum.