Can someone read this and tell me if it makes sense ? i need to fix it?

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i need to proof read it any suggestions
and this has to be convey an audience,place or perosn and we got this idea froma essay of JAMAICA KINCAID and so i tried to do it like hers these are her first sentences of her essay "Girl," "wash the white clothes on monday and put them on the stone heap; wash the color clothes on tuesday and put them on the clothsline to dry;dont walk barehead.....(and keeps goingin that style with no points)

Check Cashing Cashier

Keep your business clean all the time; people follow the quote “don’t judge the book by its cover” but as customers, they’ll criticize every aspect of your business. Even in the best industry, if it’s dirty, people will consider it unprofessional setting; you must remember; first impression is valuable. High-quality presentation grabs clients’ attention. If you eat always toss your remains in the garbage. You must clean the area where you eat, keep that in mind. As a cashier, you have to greet every single customer first. If they come complaining about your service, you must listen carefully to them, and resolve their problems with hands of “silk”. Customers are always right, never fall in discussions with them.

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Keep your business clean all the time; people follow the quote, “don’t judge the book by its cover,” but as customers, they will criticize every aspect of your business. Even in the best industry, if it is dirty, people will consider it unprofessional setting; you must remember; first impression is valuable. High-quality presentation grabs clients’ attention. If you eat always toss your remains in the garbage. You must clean the area where you eat, keep that in mind. As a cashier, you have to greet every single customer first. If they come complaining about your service, you must listen carefully to them and try to resolve their problems with hands of “silk”. Remember, "Customers are always right", never fall in discussions with them.