I have a project and its to rephrase this paragrapgh but change it so that it has the same meaning could help?

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If society allows a human being to exist in a state free from restraints the human will flourish without limitations much like a tree that grows boundless in nature. Only nature itself with its streaks of "lightening" could prevent the tree's branches from stretching toward the sky. However, as Marge Piercy profoundly states in her poem, "A Work of Artifice," society often suceeds in skillfully stifling the growth of individuals, especially women.
Piercy employs the use of a vivid extended metaphor in the beginning lines of this poem in oreder to convey her feelings toward our cunning society. If a "bonsai tree" remains in nature free to reach its fruition ti could grow to "eighty feet tall." However, the "gardener" limits the growth of the tree placing it in an "attractive pot" and stunting it’s growth to a dwarf-like "nine inches." The "gardener" replaces the trees nature to grow with a manipulative lie telling the tree that its "domestic" and "weak" qualities should overpower its tendency to grow tall and strong. The pot, as well, limits the tree and places meager expectations of development on the bonsai. Society, the metaphorical gardener of young lives, places these same stifling boundaries on undeveloped human beings. When society plants the message to remain "small and cozy" in a young mind, the individual begins to believe that a conventional "pot," "attractive" to society provides the only true place for them to dwell. Society's fear of the unknown and what they cannot understand manifests itself in the manner in which they hinder the expansion of young minds into unexplored territories of knowledge.
Piercy begins a more obvious parallel between the bonsai tree and humans by stating that "one must begin very early to dwarf" the growth of living creatures. She alludes to the treatment of Asian women. In offer to remain petite and comply with society's standards Asian women have their feet "bound." However, the stifling of the growth of women extends beyond the physical into the manner in which society "cripple[s]" their brains and puts their "hair in curlers." At this point in the poem, Piercy narrows in on the treatment of women with her allusion to "curlers." Society captures women at an early age before they have enjoyed creative and intellectual freedom and stifles their growth by brainwashing them into remaining "domestic and weak" like the pruned bonsai tree. Piercy narrows in on the fact that those who love women have the most significant impact on them and influence their growth most significantly by stating that the "hands you love to touch" stunt a woman's growth the most.
Marge Piercy's obvious feelings toward society's treatment of women manifest themselves in "A Work of Artifice" much like many of her poems. She vividly utilizes the bonsai tree as an example of how one's emotional, physical, and intellectual growth often suffers at the loving hands of society's pruning gardeners

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this analysis was made on this poem
"A Work of Artifice" by Marge Piercy
The bonsai tree
in the attractive pot
could have grown eighty feet tall
on the side of a mountain
till split by lightning.
But a gardener
carefully pruned it.
It is nine inches high. .
Every day as he
whittles back the branches
the gardener croons,
It is your nature
to be small and cozy
domestic and weak;
how lucky, little
to have a pot to grow in.
With living creatures
one must begin very early
to dwarf their growth:
the bound feet,
the crippled brain,
the hair in curlers,
the hands you
love to touch.

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