Can someone help me rewrite this paragrpah?

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I have to find five errors and make revisions to those sentences but I can't find any.

"Poetry is very diverse. Different poets speak to different people. Different poets strike different chords. We all belong to a great endeavor, and the more good poets there are, the more people will read poetry." Marge Piercy


I feel like this quote expresses what poetry is the best. Not everyone will understand a certain poem. Poetry is a very personal thing since it is raw emotion. I agree with the part about “the more good poets there are, the more people will read poetry.” I think that the reason some don’t like poetry is because they have not found the right poet. People think that if they don’t like one poem then they won‘t like any, but they just haven’t found a poet that tickles their fancy.

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Poetry is very diverse. Different poets speak to different people. Different poets strike different chords. We all belong to a great endeavor, and the more good poets there are, the more people will read poetry." Marge Piercy


This statement clearly expresses the ideas of poetry. Not everyone will understand a particular poem as they can be very personal experiences, charged with raw emotion. Due to this, it could be argued that “the more good poets there are, the more people will read poetry". This would lead to a greater chance of any one person discovering poetry that appeals to their personal taste. People think that if they don’t like one poem then they won‘t like any, but they just haven’t found a poet that tickles their fancy.


The best I could do I'm afraid. I hate not being able to use my own language effectively, and this left me frustrated and made me want to go straight back to school!

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Answer 2

Change:

I agree with the part about “the more good poets there are, the more people will read poetry.”

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I agree with the part about “the more good poets there are; the more people will read poetry.”

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I think that the reason some don’t like poetry is because they have not found the right poet.

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I think that the reason some people don’t like poetry is because they have not found the right poet.

Answer 3

On the assumption that it is not the (Grammatically poor) quotation you need to correct I would suggest the following revisions.

I feel that this quote expresses which type of poetry is the best. Not everyone will understand certain types of poems. Poetry is a very personal thing since it evokes raw emotion.

I agree with the part of the quotation that says “the more good poets there are, the more people will read poetry.” This tells me that the reason some people don’t like poetry is because they have not found poems by the right poet. People think that if they don’t like one particular poem, then they won‘t like any, but this could be because they haven’t yet found a poet that they appreciate.

Answer 4

1.like-that 2 what-which 3. the reason that some do not like poetry is that they have not found the right poet. 4. a poet who tickles 6. their fancies.

Answer 5

My suggested changes are in parentheses.

I feel like this quote espresses what poetry is the best.
(I think this quote expresses what poetry does best.)

Not everyone will understand a certain poem.

Poetry is a very personal thing since it is raw emotion.
(Poetry reaches each person differently and touches their emotions.)

I agree with the part about “the more good poets there are, the more people will read poetry.”
(I agree that if there were more good poets, more people would read poetry.)

I think that the reason some don’t like poetry is because they have not found the right poet.
(Unfortunately, some people don't like poetry. I think that is because they have not found the right poet.)

People think that if they don’t like one poem then they won‘t like any, but they just haven’t found a poet that tickles their fancy.
(Every poem and every poet is different. So if someone doesn't like a certain poem, they need to seek out a poem by a poet who can touch their emotions.)

I rewrote the entire paragraph to give a general understanding of another way to express the ideas. It avoids using the words "feel like", "the part about", and "tickles their fancy."

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Another way to say it

I agree that there are many different forms and styles used by poets expressing the ideas that they wish others to understand. Poetry affects individuals differently and no two people understand a poem in the same way. The challenge for a good poet is to find words that touch the bare emotions of not just one individual, but many. When that happens, many readers find the poetry enjoyable and want to read more. It takes many good poets with their unique poetic expressions to reach the many different people in this world. And when a person doesn't respond to one poem, they need to try other poets and other poetry until they find the special match with their own experience. Such poetry is exhilarating.